Category: International Law

hello, I have completed my case study paper and my professor has left me some feedback on what I could change. I DO NOT WANT MY paper rewritten. I just want minor changes to be made based on my professors feedback. Also please include more quotes where needed they must be real quotes from real sources. NO AI USED AT ALL PLEASE!!! I have included my professors feedback down below and also the assignment detail along with my completed paper. ALSO PLEASE REVIEW FOR ANY GRAMMAR ERRORS
PROFESSOR FEEDBACK: I still think you need a stronger thesis — what is the core argument you’re making about these places? You need to go from description of the regimes into an actual argument; what does the application of these theories imply about the future of these regimes? This should be front and center in the thesis itself.
I think you need more evidence of the kind the assignment calls for — not the overviews from think tanks and various governmental and non-governmental agencies and scholars, but instead simple news reporting of current events, which you can then interpret in the context of your argument.
It is fine to emphasize modernization theory, but remember that we have many different versions of this. You should be specific. I also think, especially in the Iraq case, that it would be useful to emphasize the resource curse version of modernization. The cultural/national cohesion argument is fine, but again, you need to illustrate some of these elements (including the consequences) through news events, not the opinions of scholars.
you’ll need to make sure you are using these theories to make an argument about the prospects of democratization in these cases, not just this descriptive argument. These are the biggest gaps I see in the paper currently.

SLO 3: Apply appropriate disciplinary methods and/or theories to the analysis of social, cultural, psychological, ethical, political, technological, or economic issues or problems.
Topic: School Resource Officers
Background Information: 
Recent high-profile school violence incidents have raised concern about protecting schools. Some states have implemented School Resource Officers (SROs), who are full-time sworn law enforcement officers, to increase security. Currently, 45% of all public schools have SROs. Concerns about the excessive use of force have raised concerns over the necessity and impact of SROs. In November 2019, for example, an SRO in Pompano Beach, FL was charged with child abuse after a video surfaced of him slamming a 15-year-old student to the ground. A few years earlier, a federal judge ruled that SROs in Birmingham, AL had used unconstitutional levels of force when they pepper sprayed students for minor disciplinary infractions, including crying in the hallway. Although the vast majority of school days pass without incident, when an SRO does use force as an instrument of discipline, questions arise about the necessity of a police presence on campuses, particularly if the force is caught on camera.
Process:
The purpose of this assignment is to enhance your critical thinking skills through a mini-essay.
What is critical thinking? It is the ability to think rationally and clearly, understanding the logical connection between concepts and ideas. It requires you to be an active learner rather than just a passive recipient of knowledge and information. Critical thinking is a way of thinking about specific things at a specific time. It is not just the accumulation and recollection of facts that you can use in the same format down the line as you would with a grammar or multiplication table learned in elementary school. Critical thinking is an adaptive skillset that helps enable a way of thinking about whatever the issue/argument is so that you can arrive at the best possible conclusion/solution.
You are required to write at least a mini-essay of 500-1,000 words showing your critical analysis of the problem or issue presented. The 500-word amount is the minimum. The 500-100 breakdown is as follows:
Introduction (Approximately 100-150 words):
Opening Statement (20-30 words): Start with a concise and engaging introduction to the problem or issue.
Background Information (40-60 words): Provide context or background information about the problem or issue’s relevance.
Thesis Statement (30-40 words): Present your main argument or thesis.
Body (Approximately 350-600 words, divided into multiple paragraphs):
First Main Point (80-120 words): Start with your most compelling argument or analysis.
Second Main Point (80-120 words): Introduce your second key argument.
Third Main Point (80-120 words): If needed, present a third major point.
Counterarguments (40-60 words): Briefly acknowledge opposing viewpoints.
Personal Analysis and Insight (50-80 words): Share your personal insight.
Conclusion (Approximately 50-100 words):
Summary of Main Points (20-30 words): Recap the key arguments or analyses.
Restate Thesis (20-30 words): Reiterate your thesis statement.
Closing Remarks (10-20 words): End with a concluding thought or call to action.
Exceeding the Word Limit:
You can allow for flexibility in the word limit. If your analysis extends beyond the specified range, that’s okay. Just make sure that the additional content adds value to your argument and does not result in unnecessary repetition. However, it’s essential to maintain clarity and conciseness throughout your essay, even if it exceeds the initial word limit.
Total Word Count:
This structure allows for flexibility, so the essay can go over the word limit while ensuring that the core content falls within the 500-1,000-word range.
The questions you need to answer by applying the knowledge from the text, scientific journals, studies, or statistics:
What are the benefits and drawbacks of having SROs involved in disciplining noncriminal behavior by students?
Should we maintain the use of SROs or abolish the practice of having SROs in schools?

Now to your final paper. You must follow the guidelines (on Canvas since the start of the semester): 1) in no more than one page, explain what groups are fighting, when, and when, who leads them, and what each group is fighting for — one presumably to defend a nation-state and another to establish some form of political autonomy or independence for an ethnic group. Begin with “In this conflict, the …. fight/fought the ….” — do not write generalities about how people have been fighting each other since the beginning of time, which is not helpful. In fact, it is so unhelpful, I will deduct points if you do that.
2) in more more than one page, give me historical background, which may include colonialism, the collapse of the Soviet Union, a civil war in a neighboring country, a previous peace deal that went bad, etc. Make sure you limit your historical background to ONE PAGE, because this is not a history class. 3) these 3-4 pages are the most important part of your paper where you will gain most points. In order to do well, I suggest that you compile a levels of analysis grid first. Make sure you know ALL the actors and what they did to cause or to solve the conflict, before you start writing this section. Spend one page each on the individual, domestic, and international level. OR, if the conflict you study is best explained on just two levels, focus on those two and tell me briefly why the third does not matter much. Then you have more room to write about actors on just two levels. This section must be at least 3 pages long.
PLEASE NOTE: you can write out each level of analysis is clear English prose, the way you would expect to do in a final paper, OR you can submit this entire segment 3) in grid form, using the same format you used in your grid submissions previously. I recommend the grid option for those of you who feel the strict organization into columns helps sorting through all the data. In prose narratives, students sometimes get stuck writing about one or two actors only, or they forget to focus on causes of conflict and (attempts at) resolutions to the conflict. The grid can help with that. So, the grid is an OPTION for section 3). You decide what works best for you.
4) in no more than one page, in the end, engage with Lee Ann Fujii and Jesse and Williams. Here I want you to demonstrate that you understand Lee Ann Fujii’s contributions to ethnic conflict studies and I am looking, yet again, for terms like primordialism, instrumentalism, ethnic outbidding, spoilers, ethnic security dilemmas, diasporas, irredentism, etc. Tell me which of the Jesse and Williams terms explains your conflict best. What would Lee Ann Fujii and Jesse and Williams say about your paper if they read it?
Sections 3) and 4) determine, if you get an A in this assignment. Chicago style, I have also attached the formal guide of the paper and I attached the topic proposal which will help you understand what we are writing about. No AI or chatgpt