“Improving Writing through Feedback: Implementing Recommended Adjustments”

Please make all the recommended adjustments (turn on comments and changes to see the recommendations).
Please make sure to turn them off so they cannot be seen when i send it back for review.
There is one comment in there about my personal experiences and stance within the research (the last comment in the conclusion)- please ignore this one comment as I will have to do a little bit more writing and reflection to add this in.